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    freestyle 3

    i lyrically drop bombs, these rhymes don't get colder
    Ordered bout a quarter, gettin stoned like a bolder.
    stackin paper like folders, got the world on my shoulders.
    yur bitch got lonely, "come over" is what I told her.
    Chew's the name, no jokes about wookies.
    spend nights gettin baked like chocolate chip cookies.
    i'm a veteran, you a rookie, you afraid, you can't look me,
    in the eyes, these guys all full of lies.
    Problems arise and there aint no surprise.
    You say you'r a pro, but i play on all-madden.
    i run this game like I'm darren McFadden.
    Your scared, here's a tissue,
    don't make this into a issue.
    i spit fire, you retire, and nobody gonna miss you.
    this shits over, period, nah i end with exclamation
    points, smoke a joint, I burn like the Temptations.
    Ain't No Mountain High Enough, when you smoke that stuff.
    that shit you puff, you know that mean green fluff.
    I roll the herb, two hits, feelin absurd
    pass it to me, for three, larry bird.

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    Re: freestyle 3

    feed others

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    Re: freestyle 3

    any suggestions are appreciated

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    Re: freestyle 3

    the larry bird line at the end was nice but most of this was pretty elementary

    the bar about getting baked like cookies was good too. Keep dropping though, for sure.

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    Re: freestyle 3

    this was really simple you did have good similies but the larry bird was a good drop, and as far as the multis go add some more, the flow was good and there structure needs a little work but you did alright, anyways you need to comment on 2 other topics or no one will feed on yours and it'll get closed read the rules

    hit up my newest one with some feed back please
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    Re: freestyle 3

    Like all the other said...put more into the verse right now it's 1-d and we like 3-d verses...you talk about weed most of ya verse and it wasn't about weed, it was about yourself and if you think as yourself as weed then this was ok.....but DROP THOSE LINKS and elevate you got some potential


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    o alright thanks, i didn't know

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