I'm cool

[Sting3r]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ft-386000.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...al-385394.html


Speaker box booming in my room & I'm vibing
watching Wiley coyote smoking peyote with lions
Zion last city with science ions of violence
Plus a mean sling shot sling pot with guidance
Highest your highness flying, messing with J
triangle defense the game pressing replay
the rest are just gay getting away pressing escape
Left with a taste you can't chase or replace
Collecting the fake, yellow tape surrounding you
my talons grew, rip, shred, your talents through
Handing your head on a silver platter
skills get skillet-ed with batter, militant hatter

chill with the laughter, let's begin to reveal
My over hand punches & back kicks with the heal
spinning back fist to the grill, power your body
& a round two sign got me, displayed from a hottie
Arm bars break arms, while you doing palates
Fight stoppage, Round three, Steve Mazagotti
I'm a boxing bastard belittling boy bucking bitches
Basically the shit with a kimora like Russel Simmons

Cuffed with some linen, in need of attention
as long as the top ten weapons give me a mention
I'm a lethal attentive man when plans hatch
glad with a mask & rap fast back ass mad max
More often than not jerks get dismembered
death fast For boxing the god first lets remember
you're not as clever get severed forever
mixing shows, what ever Fry-lock will meat benders
I'm a street vendor with a mean temper
drunk weed lender, plastic guns that's steal tempered

[Sniper Clown]

Okay....only line I was feeling was the show and not tell of:

Collecting the fake, yellow tape surrounding you
my talons grew, rip, shred, your talents through

also liked the play of words.

See, even for a self-glory verse you could've done better. I think it was keyed hastily...

The start looked promising:

watching Wiley coyote smoking peyote with lions
Zion last city with science ions of violence

My suggestion to work on the great coherent structure, weave a story and infuse more vivid imagery....

Vocabulary was meh, but I liked your wordplays.

[Sting3r]

This is not a self glory piece..
That should have been very clear when reading this..

[Sniper Clown]

ok the theme was of boxing/fighting, but i personally felt that it was funnelled thru glories... lets see what others say

[Sting3r]

ok the theme was of boxing/fighting, but i personally felt that it was funnelled thru glories... lets see what others say

If that's how it comes off, than my fault..
it was meant to be a bit different..

did key this up in a spur of the moment deal..

I seem to drop like 4 pieces a week.. so I'm bound to miss on a few..

[TheAshganMan]

okay i guess, tho i expected at least a few lines that really stood out, but like u said ur bound to miss some....
Overall 6.5/10

[fazeT]

6.5 outa 10, ouch, lmao.
Id give this a 7 at least lol
nah
this was str8, a few notible lines:
Speaker box booming in my room & I'm vibing
watching Wiley coyote smoking peyote with lions
Zion last city with science ions of violence
Plus a mean sling shot sling pot with guidance