2 Minutes And 32 Second Spit [5 Bar Verse]

[War_Lord]

Okay This Is A Quick 5 Bar Spit I Wrote In About 2 Minutes.. So Umm.. Read Up And Lemme Know What You Think.. Im White So Dont Go Too Hard On Me

Yo, First Off.. Im Vocally-Skilled And Wicked-At-That,
Talk Shit And I'll Make Sure Im Fuckin Dissin-Ya-Tracks, ~1~
Yall Bitches-Are-Whack.. So Keep Talkin-Ya-Shit,
In Every One Of My Posts I'll Be Mockin-Ya-Spits.. ~2~
Rockin-These-Scripts.. Bet You Cant Even Stay-On-A-Beat..
If You A "G To You Die" , Just Go Fuckin Lay-In-The-Streat, ~3~
Im Makin-You-Weak.. Now People Knowin-You-Are-Fake
Pussy As Fuck.. Bet I Could Even Flow-To-Your-Heart-Rate.. ~4~

-- Special Verse:

This Is A Special-Verse Thats Directed-At-Nerds Who Think They Can "Diss Me" To Get Respect-Wit-Your-Words And I Dont Give A Fuck About The Net, Trust-Me.. Crazy Motha Fucka .. Slit Your Throat And Laugh At The Blood Gushing.. Faggots? Honestly You Bitches Must-Be.. Sharpen Blades By Hand.. Make Sure Its All Rusty.. Fuck A Gun.. I'll Kill You For Fun.. Leave You Hung .. Write Your Mom A Letter With Your Blood Saying Im Number 1..

.. Aww Yo This Was Written In 2 Minutes And 32 Seconds. Nothing Special. Just Something So Yall Know I Can Flow A Little Bit. Ive Been Rapping For About A Year And A Half Now. So Hopefully I Can Get Going On This Site.. And Battle Some People And Get Some Wins Or Losses.. Doesnt Matter As Long As I Have Fun.. So.. Lemme Know What Yall Think

[Brave]

honestly, ive been rapping for like a month, and i can freestyle something better then that, im not saying its bad, i guess im just witty.

[Kalos Graphē]

Yo, First Off.. Im Vocally-Skilled And Wicked-At-That,
Talk Shit And I'll Make Sure Im Fuckin Dissin-Ya-Tracks
ok

Yall Bitches-Are-Whack.. So Keep Talkin-Ya-Shit,
In Every One Of My Posts I'll Be Mockin-Ya-Spits..
good

Rockin-These-Scripts.. Bet You Cant Even Stay-On-A-Beat..
If You A "G To You Die" , Just Go Fuckin Lay-In-The-Streat,
meh

Im Makin-You-Weak.. Now People Knowin-You-Are-Fake
Pussy As Fuck.. Bet I Could Even Flow-To-Your-Heart-Rate..
nice

pretty good, flow and rhymes were well done, i liked the structure and the multis were good, work on ur vocab a bit then it would be alot better... also try and rhyme more than once in a line, it makes it flow a bit better, keep it up whitie

This Is A Special-Verse Thats Directed-At-Nerds Who Think They Can "Diss Me" To Get Respect-Wit-Your-Words And I Dont Give A Fuck About The Net, Trust-Me.. Crazy Motha Fucka .. Slit Your Throat And Laugh At The Blood Gushing.. Faggots? Honestly You Bitches Must-Be.. Sharpen Blades By Hand.. Make Sure Its All Rusty.. Fuck A Gun.. I'll Kill You For Fun.. Leave You Hung .. Write Your Mom A Letter With Your Blood Saying Im Number 1..

flow good, rhymes is ok, multis was weaker than tha 1st one, that structure was fucked, use the enter bar when ur spittin

ok overall u got sum talent, keep it up homie

pz

[Kalos Graphē]

return tha favor

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=221957

[Kalos Graphē]

u might wanna drop 2 links

[Woganeen]

im white 2....so ima say ur crap keep at it, u'll get better

[Phantom]

" look dog u know u aint stopin my shit"...u gonna drop to the floor dead...
"cause in ur rhymes it said u gon b mockin my spit"...

"im not a nerd learn that respectfully"... ima lyrical gangster...."words got respect 4 me" u can rap im jus spittin ight no beef

[Phantom]

born that waz to prove to u i should b in 1-2

[sILLable]

you need toelevate....on everyaspect..yur rhyme scheme was ecent....and for yo info..the first verse was 4 bars....and the"special"verse was only 3 bars...anyway...elevate.~1~