please?
please?
A few achievements here and there
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I havent read the last one but this one was creative no doubt great description of surroundings....spring..spring..wow Vocab was high but ok to make a good poem doesnt really need alot of vocab just alot of emotions and imagery. Nice one lyric
Ok.
A nice poetic piece here.
As ever in poetry..
.. Imagery is a must.
And you had lots of it.
I can nicely picture the scenes that you described in my head.
Im not really a poetry person.
But I know a good piece when I see one.
This was nice.
Hit this up if you will, please.
Only need one more vote..
Freeman Vs T West (Topical.)
Thanks, man.
Peace.
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well done. This was a very nice read and you had a grasp of what you were writing here. I haven't read the first part but I wasn't really concerned this stood on its own.
It was a nice poem, great imagery and a nice poetic flow.
i think your doing a good job of exploring from what i've read of you so far. Continue to explore... thats the only advice worthy of giving because your shit seems structurally sound but, oh.. I think you missed a plural somewhere but I'm on a different page so I can't remember which word.
ha.
Anyway, continue to explore with poetic style.... read others a lot.... nice shit.
...and like I said in that other thread of yours man you gotta stop upping your shit so much... you did like 7 times in one page in this thread.... not cool, there are others in this forum as well...
anyway good work.
.peace.
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