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I Cry For My Daughter...
Everyday before I leave for work...
I kiss my sleeping daughter goodbye...
You see, she's two years old, with long brown hair...
And that girl's my whole life.
But one thing I notice when I get home...
Even though I'm not gone that long.
Is that fact that my child has somehow grown...
Then it hits me like a sad song.
So I cry for my daughter cuz everyday that passes marks one less day of childhood she has left.
I cry for my daughter cuz everyday that passes marks one less day of her being at home playing.
I cry for my daughter cuz everyday that passes brings her one day closer to making a hard decision.
I cry for my daughter cuz everyday that passes brings her one day closer to realizing what death is.
And I weep at the thought of her being one day closer to losing a loved one...
Because I know I won't live forever.
And then I fuckin bawl...cuz I know which each passing day she gets closer and closer to her own death.
And the thought of my baby girl, my beautiful angel, my beloved J.C. being dead, being autopsied, being hollowed out and put on display or in an oven or in an urn or into the cold, dark ground...
Makes me wanna die.
And just as panic is about to envelop me...
Just as rage and hate over all these inevetibilities begins to drown and smother my sanity...
Just when I think there's nothing good or worthwhile about this whole fucking planet or it's shitty way of life...
She looks up and smiles at me.
And instantly, everything negative fades away...
Because...
What also accompanies each passing day...
Is a new smile from her, a new word she's learned to say, another hug from her, and another "I love you, Daddy"...
Thank you for reading.
Peace
Life, by Sharp.
Never, by Fantazee
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I really liked your emotion in this piece B2K your poets voice was strong and it is evident from reading this how much she means to you. Because you dont drop poems with the regularity of some other people here it also added to the power driving home the importance. The way you wrote it i had the feeling that someone was reading it to me or as if it was actually happening, i can really relate to the topic, overall a very good read, i really enjoyed it in a special way, as more then a poem. My fave part was "And then I fuckin bawl..." lol i actually laughed at that part, it was a good break in the train of thought but still continued the theme, props, 1luv.
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good...you had powerfule motion, and the voice was strong...nothin special in ways of structure or flow, but you did keep a flow as you released your emotions...this wasn't bad...
8.8/10
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Thanks a bunch, people...
Don't know what got into me today.
Peace
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Very good. Emotion like crazy. I like the pieces you write about your daughter cuz i always feel the emotion. Good job.
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This was good. Sometimes I do the same for my dad, but I guess its a little different. Emotion was awesome, and the flow was great. Structure was good and I loved the meaning in it. This had some really deep emotion at points and the imagery was amazin. Overall, I liked it. Great job. Keep up.
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wow my god you just really tore me apart. all these twistes emotions, all based on a love so strong, real that you could tell it was just ripping you apart, yet its what is holding you together. i feel you. im a mother of a girl you would be 3 now, but God saw it fit better to have her with him. so i see what your thinking the passage of thinking your following, thou im sure alot of ppl can. this is such a strong personal poem its one that i cant rate or grade you upon, and i dont think it really matters to you what we think about it. its your life and your feelings, and i just want to say i hear you.
T
True Love
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wow. the emotion in this is really truely deep. it was great. the flow was also really good. And like someone up ^^^^^ there said your poets voice was truely real. and it is truely evident that she means everything to you and that your world revolves around her soul being. and that is awsome! great jo, i enjoyed reading this peice
............fav part..........
She looks up and smiles at me.
And instantly, everything negative fades away...
Because...
What also accompanies each passing day...
Is a new smile from her, a new word she's learned to say, another hug from her, and another "I love you, Daddy"...
keep droppin
....bless
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You three gals really appreciated my poem...
Thank you...
And Fel, I'm so, so sorry you lost your baby.
I almost wanna cry just reading what you typed.
I'm so sorry, dear.
Thank you all, ladies...
Thank you, everyone.
Peace
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Good piece i really feel the emotion you put into this it was deep your flow was also well everything was crisp and from the heart i felt Much respect for you